I LOVE the little details like his shirt ripping at the seams and the veins on his hands. And the texture on the wall is so satisfying. =w+ I think all of your pieces need to be looked at at least five times in order to let it all seep in~
Those shoes look incredibly underused....they need some tap dancing. I like that sort of empty/given up look you gave him. It makes him sad...because the expression is sad...so therefore, he is sad, unless he is acting .____.
I see Jonas has a thing for shoes back when he was in the asylum...Hm, I wonder what the shoes represent c: This is so great It's very interesting to see more about his past in the asylum ;u; I can't wait till that is covered in the comic~Ooh, Jonas always makes me wonder <3
I wish the wrinkles in his sleeves weren't so hard edged. I think they are demanding more attention that they actually need. His face is clearly the focal point, and naturally, humans tend to look at faces first. More specifically the eyes: which you have rendered the right eye beautifully. Kudos. We also tend to follow the implied line of sight, so the next place my attention goes to his hand, which I think you intended (as hands are the second most interesting feature to the human eye). But if the shoulder to wrist had been not as attention demanding, it would have also been a nice added directional guidance to help move the viewers eyes through the piece.
I'd also soften all the other edges in the clothing. They aren't that important. Art isn't photography. Hard/soft and lost/found edges add interest through variation and are very beautiful. Render the face as you have and as you move farther away from the focal point I'd use softer and softer edges.
Composition wise I think you have done very well. I like how Jonas is off center and you keep the eye within the format by using the darker valued shoes. And the composition is balanced with the little bit of higher value with the window and the light against the wall.
Also, I love the texture on the wall.
You dont have to listen to my ideas to help strengthen the image. Its your artwork and you have every right to leave it just as it is if you like. I just thought Id leave it out there as an option.
Can you see them? Unseen Scream for help There is no way in
I think I've commented on this before, but I'm trying to look at the writing at different angles. I can see the first four lines pretty clearly. The last one I'm not sure about. If it's the whole word, it looks like "End." If it's just part of a word, it could be the beginning of "Prison" or "Anya."
In some ways, this makes me think of Dr. Manette from A Tale of Two Cities. But I think I really enjoy the tilt of this scene. It could have been a little roo relaxed in the standard position, but the angle makes him seem more unhinged despite the somewhat calm expression.
I think part of it says "Can you hear them" But the rest I can't read because since my computer is just terrible right now it won't let me full view it and I didn't memorize it sooo yeah....but that part I remember.....I think X3 *Stabs comp*
"can you hear them? unseen they scream for help there is no way in Iane..."
Or at least that's what I gathered, he looks like he just started to put down the piece of wood and to sit there for hours staring at it. I love the colors you used and I have a theory for his shoes. Perhaps someone he had at one point walked miles and miles without shoes when he was a kid, then a shoe maker from his childhood made him some shoes and took him in.From then on he was a shoe maker. They say that when you make something, and there's a reason it super close to you, you make it with all your soul. Maybe these shoes were so precious to him, they are parts of his soul. Though his absence of shoes in the dream is odd to say. He says that they are representations of you past and what you've done, shoes really do describe Jonas in this sense, a self enlightenment on his behalf.
I like the drama of the picture! I do look forward to seeing more explanation of Jonas in the comic. not that I'm trying to rush it-- he's just so interesting. I like the written words on the wall as well.
There's so much to comment on, the perspective, the bleak color scheme, the shoes, his stubble and completely different look from how we see him in the comic, but really it's all undermined by the eyes. I haven't ever seen a picture that had such emotions through the eyes before. It's just subtle despair, depression, and a little hint of mania. This is fantastic.